This poem is champing at the bit. Should I just let it run?

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Electra


by TD Euwaite





Hey


wait for me


while I climb down from this tree


One shoe on, the other, I don’t see





Don’t


run so fast


that’s a lifetime you’ve just passed


Speed will get you there, if you last





Please


stop and breath


pull a flower from your sleeve


Give it to the one you know believes





Go


be the show


be the one who always glows


I will wait for you, walking slow





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This poem is champing at the bit. Should I just let it run?
What a wonderful pattern! Your best so far for me today.
Reply:Are you okay?


I ask or say


I can see who will win this race


look at the pace


Yeah please wait


so you can have a mate


don't you want any company


from some like me?


Don't go too fast


I can see you have already past


I will catch up to you


and it is true


We will see who will be a winner


and to have dinner.


I will get by


but until then it is good bye.
Reply:TD, this is simply amazing, and I know I say that so often, but only because it's true. I love the format, the rhyme scheme and the name. But I think you had a lazy fingers issue with the word "breathe." Don't worry, I understand, do it all the time myself. For some reason, the line "that's a lifetime you've just passed" really stands out to me. I love it. Thank you.
Reply:If she looks like the comic book Electra, you might want to move a little faster! But with your fertile imagination I am sure you can dream while waiting. Nicely said.
Reply:Reminds me of http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DoWF2YalY...


Drat, that link is supposed to go to "Feeling Groovy" Simon and Garfunkel.
Reply:Hey, hey!!


i liked it....alote!!! :)


I give it a 9 out of 10!!!


You are very good at this and you seem to write alote of poems!!


Very nice!!








have a great day!! :)
Reply:not slow


not fast


half fast
Reply:I like this poem. Both speeds have their time and place.
Reply:I thought it was good... I found it to be a bit humorous
Reply:I loved it !! Either pace ...running OR walking slow ..........Make it there



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