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Skin of molten gold, eyes of pure diamond, more valuable then life itself, Beauty beyond eyes sight cannot be Witnessed anywhere else. A love like this cannot be put into words. A Love so deep that it hurts. A love so passionate its hot. It overtakes us, starting at the very base, the soles of our shoes and climbs slowly up past our calfs, past our knees, Faster and faster until we are surrounded by its whirling, swirling faster and faster surrounded by the love of each other. It ventures up, up into our stomachs and reaches deep into our body and draws forth each soul bringing them together side by side, a pulsing purple ball of energy from each of us. then for one solid minute silence. And then.. ever so slowly they shutter, vibrate… and clash into each other becoming one intense deep blood red ball of energy. And then as fast as it came it vanishes into thin air always there but invisible to the human eye.

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ooooooooh you gave me chills


I can feel your love


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Reply:Well, I can%26#039;t really rate you on a scale of one to something.
Reply:it is important what she thinks of it.





however you did a great job.





it gets the message across loud and clear.





keep it up.
Reply:Have you ever heard of the song called I%26#039;m sprung..I beleive a character named T-pain sUng it...eh
Reply:its pretty good, the only change i would make is the repetative words, it seems like u kinda keep repeating urself and the more times something gets repeated the less intresting it becomes. i thikn that if u can figure out how to use something diffrent than faster and faster, and side by side, it ventures up, up...i like%26quot;it ventures up%26quot;, but maybe u can change the next part to %26quot;higher into our stomachs.and %26quot;then for one solid minute silence,And then%26quot;...if u could change%26quot;And then%26quot;to something else it would sound alot better. u actually use %26quot;and then%26quot;3 times...poemss like this sound so much bettter if things are not repeated more than once. but i thik if u change the repetative words then it will be perfect,. the rest sounds beautiful!!
Reply:That%26#039;s a good poem! Did you write it?
Reply:Great poem!! When you can almost visualize and feel the emotions you really have something. Great writing!!
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